Sample Student Essays
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Sample 1
Excerpt: Student Original
It only took me 16 years to realize, in a sense, life is just a game. Since my elementary years, I have always been attracted to the concepts of gaming. For instance, my family used to play a ton of board games such as monopoly, the game of life, and uno. Due to my competitive characteristic, every round of each game was a big deal for me. So much so that I would often cry after I lost. As I got bigger, I stopped crying as much after losing. This is not because I had become a less competitive person but more because I realized that crying after losing does not help me at all.
Excerpt: Student Final Submission
It was a warm, breezy day in late September. On the brink of fall, the leaves started changing colors and my autumnal nostalgia was triggered by the scent of apple and cinnamon in the air. Walking through the field of freshly cut grass, it was hard not to notice the enormous, colorful balloons that complimented the blue canvas. “How could something that gigantic be floating in the sky?” I thought to myself. To an eleven-year-old mind, the force of buoyancy acting in terms of air’s density was an idea yet to be discovered. On an ordinary day in the Adirondacks, I found extraordinary excitement by watching the hot air balloons as they sparked a stream of curiosity in my mind...
Sample 2
Excerpt from Essay Accepted to Cornell University
...In the two weeks prior that I had spent in New York as a student of The School of the New York Times, I had burned through numerous SD cards photographing the city across various boroughs, weather conditions, and times of day, transforming my casual enjoyment of photography into a fervent passion, the black hunk of plastic around my neck into an extension of myself. At a time when I was trying to find my direction in life, photography became my internal metronome, a craft that constantly pushed me to seek out opportunities to create art and to see the potential art-making opportunities in everyday situations and items; the perfect obsession for my voracious desire to learn...
Sample 3
Excerpt from Essay Accepted to Northwestern University
...Individuality is still a curious concept for me to understand since much of our selves are built by the people and culture surrounding us. So in essence, my personality really ​was​ a knock-off of my parents’, and it was perfectly acceptable to share favorites. The conglomerate of colors that have shaped us form the character we pride ourselves in. From senior homes to tutor centers for kindergarteners, I found each individual carrying themselves in a way that is uniquely theirs. Sarah, just four years old, worked twice as fast when I praised her after each question she completed. In contrast, Sadie’s performance peaked when I was stricter and gave less approval. This realization was not the start of my curiosity of individuality, but rather the discovery of what I truly find fascinating...
Sample 4
Excerpt from Essay Accepted to the University of Michigan
I was born in East Lansing, Michigan — Spartan Central. On a bookshelf in my house sat a grotesque looking Spartan plush; in the house’s drawers were mountains of Michigan State T-shirts. MSU was where my mother received her Ph.D., and where my immigrant parents met their first friends in the United States. As such, I was taught that UMich were the “bad guys,” the Darth Vader to our Luke in every scenario.
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As I grew older, I quickly began thinking independently of my parents. The science fair projects forced upon me by my science-minded parents never captured my intrigue, the abstract explanations of the chemical reactions behind the colorful slime and clay volcano befuddling my unimpressed mind. Instead, I found myself captivated by numbers, and how every math question was a puzzle, every answer a complete picture...